Writing a fight scene with multiple fighters #Pietas #SpaceOpera #MFRWhooks

A fight scene from two points of view #Pietas #SpaceOpera #MFRWhooks

Writing a Fight Scene

Pietas dominates as the main character in Bringer of Chaos. In a major fight scene early in the book, he faces eight human warriors. In Lights Out, the prequel, the same scene is shown from the viewpoint of a human. Pietas has multiple psychic gifts, among them, the ability to move at what humans perceive as super speed.

In his mind, his opponents are numbers. Here are the two fight scenes side by side for comparison.

Bringer of Chaos Fight Scene

Pietas activated his ability called zip. The pseudo speed meant he could move at a regular pace, but humans perceived him as a blur. They could not focus on him long enough to get close. To him, everyone moved in slow motion.

He flipped onto his feet, braced both hands on his pod, and kicked Three and Four square in the chest.

He pushed off the pod, and the momentum carried him straight into the arms of Five and Six. They stumbled backward, tumbling Seven and Eight onto the floor.

Lights Out Fight Scene

Pietas flashed into speed mode.

Tornahdo's world moved in slow motion.

A blur showed where the Ultra had been. Pietas halted, braced both hands on a pod and kicked a pair of ghosts behind him.

They flew backward. Slow.

Momentum carried the Ultra straight toward Tornahdo.

Stumbling out of the way, Tornahdo went down in a tumble, taking out the ghost beside him, who knocked down the last two.

Writing an action scene with multiple fighters challenged me as a writer. I learned there are three things every writer must do when creating a multiple character fight scene. They are: plan, plan and then plan. When I wrote Lights Out, Bringer of Chaos had already been published. That meant I could not deviate from what had already taken place. The actions and activity were canon to the story. To remain faithful to it, get all the same details and tell it in a fresh way, I wrote Lights Out with the other book open. The fighters had to be attacked in the same order. That meant I had to show what the hero in Lights Out was doing while Pietas was busy attacking Tornahdo's comrades.

This fight took place in a room with lifepods, so there were big obstacles. But that meant there were also spots one person could spring over to attack. So a big consideration for planning is to know exactly what is the room. This is called blocking. Knowing where each person is in the room and what they are doing will help you determine who will do what -- and who can do what. After all, you can't have the hero bashing the villain in the head if the villain hasn't reached the hero's part of the room.

Draw the layout of the room on graph paper, considering these questions:
What furniture or fixtures are present?
Where is the entry? Are there windows? Other doors? Trapdoors? Other exits?
How much manuevering room does the hero have?
If you have more than one fighter, place them in the room as well.
Where does each person go during the fight?
Which character is doing what?
Who is carrying weapons?
Can they use them in the space allowed?
Are there dangers in using weapons in an enclosed area? What are they?
Do the characters have special powers?
Are those powers triggered by something or someone in the room?
What are the consequences if they are?

The list could be endless. At some point, it's best to put down the pencil and graph paper, go to the computer (or wherever you write) and get down to business. You can't edit a blank page. Plan the scene, write the scene, tweak the scene, love the scene. Warning: it's fun planning, but if you're a writer, you must also write. Never let the fun of planning keep you from the work of writing.

What are your suggestions for writing a fight scene? Please share them in the comments.


Nik Nitsvetov

Nik Nitsvetov (above, as Pietas) is a photographer and award-winning cosplayer. A gamer and anime fan, he often cosplays characters from popular series. He lives in Russia and is a strong supporter of Russian Cosplay. His personal photography ranges from cosplay to portraits and often includes animals and nature. You will find him online through various social media. (Photo credit for Pietas @by_cosphoto)
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Lights Out by Kayelle Allen

Writing a fight scene with multiple fighters #Pietas #SpaceOpera #MFRWhooks He can save mankind. After he does one important thing. Die.
Join the Ghost Corps, they said. You'll live forever, they said. You'll save mankind, they said. They didn't say that to do it, first he had to die.
When Tornahdo signs on the dotted line, he puts his life into the steady hands of the mighty Ghost Corps. Three grisly deaths and three agonizing resurrections later, he's assigned duty on the space station Enderium Six.
He's facing his most dangerous mission yet, the very reason the corps exists.
Do they expect him to win? Fat chance. Tornahdo and his team are already dead and this mission is codenamed "Lights Out." No, there's more to this than he can see.
To discover the truth, he must face an unbeatable, unkillable enemy, and this time--somehow--find a way to keep himself alive...
Lights Out is in the Science Fiction/Space Opera anthology The Expanding Universe Vol 4, edited by Craig Martelle out Sept 17, 2018
https://kayelleallen.com/lights-out-save-mankind/



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About Kayelle Allen

Kayelle Allen did a tour in the US Navy, where she climbed around airplanes (on the ground of course) fixing black boxes that helped pilots find their way home. She wrote her first science fiction novel at 18, and to this day, it's hidden under the bed, where she vows it will remain. Gems from it, though, launched several series in her galaxy-wide universe of stories. From childhood, Kayelle was the victim of an overactive imagination and inherited the Irish gift of gab from her mother. From her father, she got a healthy respect for mechanical things. No wonder she writes Science Fiction and Fantasy peopled with crazy androids, mythic heroes and warriors who purr.
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6 Responses to Writing a fight scene with multiple fighters #Pietas #SpaceOpera #MFRWhooks

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    You are so organized you shame me!
    And speaking of being ashamed . . . I’m afraid I forgot to sign up for this week’s blog hop, but I’d love for you to take a look at my hook regardless.

  2. henhousepublishing says:

    Fight scenes are difficult, especially when you don’t have BLAM! and POW! like the old Batman TV series did.

  3. janwal says:

    I always think of writing fight scenes like choreography though I usually stick to two fighters and they usually fight with swords, a holdover from the days when I fenced. You did a great job of showing the fight two ways.